Is my writing too formal?
Possibly. Writers working in a second language often overcorrect toward formality, producing long Latinate words and heavy nominalizations. English academic prose is more direct than many writers expect, and shorter words are frequently the better choice.
This comes up on Academic English for International Students, where it is answered in the context of the work itself.
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